Atul,
First of all Great Work to submit your First answer at Answer Writing, You are more closer to your goal of Improving Answer Writing.
Review on your Answer :
1. Good Introduction, Definition of Emotional Intelligence
2. Good Example used, Enriched with Mentioning of Daniel Goleman
3. Nicely defined all 5 component of EI
4. Can also mention more example with each component. Ex : Martin Luther King Social Awareness, Bhagvat Geeta Self Awareness and Self Management and likewise.
5. Give equal emphasis on Learning of EI. Can Expand this also more.
6. Apt Conclusion.
Well Done, Keep Writing.